The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram
chart
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apply
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gives information about making carbonated drinks.
Overall
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, the diagram illustrates a process
consists
Correct pronoun usage
that consists
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a
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of
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several stages, beginning with
water
Use synonyms
being cleaned and ending with
product
Correct article usage
the product
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are
Verb problem
apply
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being packaged. The process is linear, involving five distinct steps to complete it. First of all, the process starts with raw
water
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is
Wrong verb form
being
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cleaned by using spesific machine throughout fillter and the
water
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are softned and chemicals
Correct word order
is softened and chemicals are added
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,
then
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loaded into a pump.
The
Correct determiner usage
Following
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following
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this
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,
water
Use synonyms
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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being
evapoated
Correct your spelling
evaporated
and carbonated by electric heaters all the way through a
coling
Correct your spelling
cooling
pipe
Correct word choice
, and
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also
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carbon dioxide
are
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is
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being added. After that,
water
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being
Wrong verb form
is
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mixed by
mixing
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the mixing
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tank
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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three items are added
coloring
Punctuation problem
: colouring
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, syrup, and flavour and pass throug a filter.
Subsequently
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, the carbonated drinks are
filltered
Correct your spelling
filtered
and
fillied
Wrong verb form
filled
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into two different forms
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such
Punctuation problem
, such
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as bottles or cans. In the final stage, the
product
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products
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are being packaged into boxes and
transport
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transported
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to
final
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the final
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distrubtion
Correct your spelling
distribution
by trucks.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the eighth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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