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THE TABLE BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT A BAKERY'S AVAREAGE SALES IN THREE DIFFERNET BRANCHES IN 2015.

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table
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 illustrates information about a bakery avareage sales in three
differnet
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different
 branches in 2015. It includes
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number
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the number
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 and items of every average.
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table
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 shows
average
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the average
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 including
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vancouver
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Vancouver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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,
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vancouver
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Vancouver Dunsmuir Street
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dunsmuir
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street
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 and
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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. As you can see in
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, in
vancouver
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georgia
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street
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 had increased in
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number
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the number
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 of
transaction
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transactions
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 by 854
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while
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vancouver
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Vancouver Dunsmuir Street
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dunsmuir
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street
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 decreased in
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number
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 of transactions by 750, but
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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 dropped to 390. The
vancouver
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georgia
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street
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 higher than
vancouver
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drake
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street
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 in
number
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 of transaction. In transaction value, the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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 grew by 10.69
dollers
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while
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vancouver
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Vancouver Dunsmuir Street
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dunsmuir
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street
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 declined by 5.61
dollers
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 and the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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 decreased by 9.02
dollers
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. The
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vancouver
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Vancouver Dunsmuir Street
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dunsmuir
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street
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 is lower than the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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number
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the number
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 of eat transations, the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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 rose by 405 ,the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Dunsmuir Street
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dunsmuir
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street
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 dropped by 358.
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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 declined by 200. The
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vancouver
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Vancouver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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 was
biggest
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 than
vancouver
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drake
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street
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 in
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number
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the number
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 of eat
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transactions
. In
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number
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 of take-away transactions, the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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 climbed by 449, the
vancouver
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dunsmuir
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street
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 go down by 392
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while
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 the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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 declined by 190. The
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vancouver
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Vancouver Drake Street
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drake
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street
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 was less than the
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vancouver
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Vancouver Dunsmuir
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dunsmuir
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 in
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number
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the number
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 of take-away transactions. The most popular item in
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vancouver
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Vancouver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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 was
chicken
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 burger
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while
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 the
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vancouver dunsimuir
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Vancouver Dunsmuir Street
street
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 was chicken wings. The most popular item in the
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vancouver
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Vancouver
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street
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 was chicken pasta. In sum, the
table
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explain
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 clearly the
bakery
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bakery's
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 average sales in three different branches in 2015. The most popular was the
vanconver
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VanConver Georgia Street
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georgia
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street
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. The lowest
popularty
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popularity
 was the
vanconver
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Van Conver Drake Street
drake
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street
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, number, vancouver, georgia, street, dunsmuir, drake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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