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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

You Write an email Asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need Saying why you nee Making arrangements to

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Dear Ngoc I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to ask you about your
fly
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flight
 on
weekend
Correct article usage
the weekend
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and
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, and
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 could you bring some
tradition
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traditional
 foods
in
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from
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 our country
,
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?
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 I really miss that flavour.
You can
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Can you
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 bring about 27kg
right
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, right
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? If you don't bring too many clothes, it is
the
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a
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 good way to
addition
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add
 food
in
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to
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 your vali.
Moreover
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, I need the
headphone
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headphones
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 that I
have
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apply
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left at my home
so
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, so
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 when you come, please bring
it
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them
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 for me. I haven't
eat
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eaten
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 our country foods for 2 months, so I really miss the flavour and forgot how
it delicious
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delicious it is
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.
In addition
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, I need you
bring
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to bring
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 the
headphone
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headphones
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 because my neighbours
really
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are really
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 noisy and my study environment
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also
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is also
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have
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noisy with
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 traffic
noisy
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,
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 so I couldn't concentrate on my study. When you arrive in the morning on 15th September, I will
take
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pick
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 you
at
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up from
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 the airport.
Then
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 come to my home, take a rest. And in the afternoon, we can explore
this
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 city together and buy some
gift
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gifts
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 for our
loved-ones
Correct your spelling
loved ones
. I am waiting for your coming. We will enjoy many interesting things. Your best friend, Thoai My

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task response
Say all three parts more clearly: what to bring, why you need them, and the plan when your friend comes.
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Use short clear sentences. Some ideas are good, but some parts are hard to understand.
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Give one or two clear details for each thing. For example, say what food you want and why the headphone is important.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main idea in its own paragraph: request, reason, and plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words like and, so, because, then, and when.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the one before it. A few parts now feel sudden or not smooth.
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You answered the main email task and asked your friend to bring things from home.
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You gave reasons for the food and the headphone, which helps your ideas feel real.
coherence and cohesion
Your email has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You used time words like when and then to show your plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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