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the chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment.

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The bar chart depicts the mean time married couples
work
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 in waged labor
work
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 everyday.
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, men tend to
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 more
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 than women do when compensated,
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 females' participation in unpaid housework exceeded that of males in
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 category. And , totally, the working time of wives of all ages is greater than that of their husbands. Starting with wedded partners aged 24 to 44, typically, the husband would labour around 7
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 a day when paid,
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 to just over 5
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 a wife does. Meanwhile, the male spouse will participate in home chores for roughly 2 to 3
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 per day , unlike the female , who will do about 5
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 of domestic duties daily. Coming to older pairs between the ages of 45 and 64, where the man will
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work
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 7
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 more or less, whilst a woman in
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 age seems to labour longer shifts per day.
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, both genders in
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 age group spend less time working on unpaid house tasks.

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