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The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The table
let
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lets
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 us know the
cells
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number of cells
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 made by a
coffee
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 shop
an
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and an
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 office building on a typical weekday. We will summarise the important information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Firstly
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, the most common sales made by a
coffee
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 shop and an office building
is
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are
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pastries
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pastries,
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 it's 275 and 7.30 to 10 .30
but
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, but
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then
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come
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comes
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coffee
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coffee,
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 it's 265 from 7.30 to 10 .30 it's the most
thing
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common thing
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 people buy
it
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apply
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.
While
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, the most
think people
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people think they
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 take from the
coffee
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 shop
is
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are
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 sandwiches
when
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, when
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 it's 10.30-
2.30
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2.30,
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 it's like lunch.
The most think people
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Most people think they
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 buy in all
time
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time,
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 it's
coffee
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the
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, the
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 total and all times 795 from 730 morning to 830
evening
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evening,
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then
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 come
pastries
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pastries,
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 it's around 600 in the total. Contrast, the
last
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 thing little persons like to buy is tea total from the morning to night
270
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, 270
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then
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, then
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 come
sandwiches
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sandwiches,
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 it's around 400 in total . In the end, most
of
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apply
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humans like to drink
coffee
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 more than eat or drink tea.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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