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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

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Introduction
studying
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Studying
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 abroad has many
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 and disadvantages. It
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 on the
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students
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 vision of their
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academic
 future.
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Body · 1
First of all, the
advantages
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 of
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studying
 out of the country are many. One example is that
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 the student who
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chooses
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 to study outside can choose the university that has a
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very
 high ranking in QS
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 allows him or her to get
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great
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opportunities
 in finding jobs.
another
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 example is that
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students
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 how has experiens in studing out of their countries can discover
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life
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 a very small ages
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 they
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depend
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their ownself
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themselves
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.
Body · 2
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 the other hand, people
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who
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 do not agree with
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studying abroad
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have heard
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a
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bad stories
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about
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 it or might be brefer to be with
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families
 for some reason. One example of
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disadvantages
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 some
students
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 say that being with our family and having a free place to live with them is easier. another instance, some people
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prefer
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universities because
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 rank.
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To
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 sum up,
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studying abroad
 has a lot of
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 and
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disadvantages
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 it is sharply relay on the
students
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 and what they prefer.
from
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From
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 my point of view, I prefer
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studying abroad
 because of it penifit on my life ,expirence and
acadimic improvment
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academic improvement
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Answer both sides more fully. You write about good and bad points, but some ideas are too short.
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Add clearer examples. Your examples are related, but they need more detail to feel real and strong.
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Give a clearer main view. Your final view is present, but your position can be stronger from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences do not connect well, and some words are used in the wrong place.
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Check paragraph flow. Some points repeat, and some sentences are hard to follow.
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You answer the topic and talk about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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Your opinion is clear in the end.
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You use examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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