You recently moved to a new apartment, but you are facing several problems there. Write a letter to the apartment manager. In your letter: * describe the problems in the apartment * explain how these problems are affecting you * say what you would like the manager to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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to express my disappointment
of
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with
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moving into
this
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apartment
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apartment,
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as there are too many problems
over
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apply
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here. There is not only one but
couple
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a couple
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of
the
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apply
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problems that I am currently facing in
this
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new apartment.
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, the electronics
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such
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, such
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as
microwave
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the microwave
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is not working.
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to
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, there is a water leakage near the living room
which
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is completely unbearable These problems are affecting my daily routine. As I am living alone, I just cook once in the morning, and
then
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microwave the food after coming from work. Since it is not working, I have to order food from the restaurant.
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, the leakage in the hall is affecting my plans
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the television that I have kept in the dining room. I would like you to call the electrician to fix the electronics and the person who can fix the leakage. I look forward to your prompt response and a satisfactory resolution to
this
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issue. Yours faithfully Ayush shukla

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Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about each problem and what help you want.
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Task response: Use more correct formal words, like 'I am writing to express my disappointment with the apartment.'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear order: problem, effect, and request. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words more clearly, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'As a result', and 'Therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph and check small grammar errors so your meaning is easier to follow.
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Task response: You cover the problems, their effect on your life, and what you want the manager to do.
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Task response: The tone is mostly formal and suitable for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear beginning and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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