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According to some people , stydents from all economic backgrounds should be able to attend university . They belive that the government should provide free university education for every one , do you agree with view

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Introduction
Some people think free higher
education
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 should be provided by the government ,to allow more and more
students
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 from different economic backgrounds
go
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to go
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 to the university. I would argue that
,
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apply
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higher
education
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 should be free, as
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 will help to prove the equality and
expande
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expand
 the educated layer in the community.
Body · 1
Free tretiry
education
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 emphisis equality in the society among the different backgrounds economic abblity ,
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 step will allow
students
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 from lower income families and rich ones to contact each other and avoid any isolation in our community for those who don't rean enough money ,
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 can lead to more contribution in our economic in the future , all we will feel the responsiblity to our society and working hard to reach higher and higher.
Body · 2
The more
students
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 go to the uni the more talents we have in the future .
we
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 will have a lot of creative working teams across the job market if we have more
students
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 . There are many student hanger for success
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, but
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 they don't have
funding
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the funding
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 to
castle
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further
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 their skills in professtional
education
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 university ,
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 we give them
free
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a free
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 chance to complete
thier
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their
education
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 encourge them to
foucs
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focus
 on their stduies , recent UK studies show
students
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 in a
government funded
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government-funded
 university
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 higher marks and
genrate
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generate
 new ideas in their projects
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 of the graduate year .
Conclusion
In
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conclusion,
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 I would argue that
government
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the government
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 should provide free higher
education
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 for all
students
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 who meet the entry
requirments
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requirements
 on the grounds prove equality to get more educated young people in our community .

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task response
Answer the question more fully. Say clearly why you agree, and add one more clear reason.
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Use ideas that are easy to follow. Some parts are hard to understand because the meaning is not clear.
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Give a more real and clear example. The UK study example is not explained enough.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body paragraph, then explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are too long and mixed, so the reader may get lost.
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You answer the topic and show a clear opinion: higher education should be free.
coherence and cohesion
You include an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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Your two main ideas are relevant: equal chance and more skilled people in the future.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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