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In some countries, most epople prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Introduction
Nowadays, Many
people
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 prefer to
rent
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 their
homes
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 rather than
buying
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buy
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 them. Some
people
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 think that
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rent
Wrong verb form
renting
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 their
homes
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 rather than buying them is a good
idea
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while
Punctuation problem
, while
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 other
people
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 think that it is a bad
idea
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 we will explain both
view
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the
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 advantages and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.
Body · 1
On one hand, some
people
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 think that
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rent
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renting
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 their
homes
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 rather than buying them is more comfortable for them.
In addition
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, there
some
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are some
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people
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don't
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who don't
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 have any example
how
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of what
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 their
home
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look
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looks
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 like .
For example
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, Ahmed
think
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thinks
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 that
,
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apply
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he went to live in
big
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a big
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 house with
big
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a big
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 garden
but
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, but
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some time
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sometimes
 he think small house is enough
to
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for
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 him, so he
plan
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plans
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 to live
two
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in two
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typs
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types
 of houses and see
what
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which
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 is more possible
to
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for
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 him.
Moreover
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,
Some student
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some students
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 study in another country far from their family, so
rent
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home
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 is
best
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the best
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 option for them. Just like my uncle Ali
study
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studied
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 , he
live
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lives
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 in
rent
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home
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 near his
collage
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college
.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, other
people
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 think that
rent
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home
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 is
bad
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a bad
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idea
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.
Moreover
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, they think that
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rent
Replace the word
renting
homes
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 is just
lost their
Replace the word
a loss of
 money.
For instance
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, if they save the
rent
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 money in
bank
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a bank
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 for 2 years , they will
able
Verb problem
be able
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 to buy their
on
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own
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home
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.
Furthermore
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, the
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rent
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rented
homes
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 have many problems , just like the kitchen
need
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needs
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 to
rechange
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be replaced
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 or the material that
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home
Correct article usage
the home
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build
Wrong verb form
is built
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 from is
to
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too
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 bad.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there is
not
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no
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 easy answer for
this
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 question.The
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rent
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rented
homes
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is
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are
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 not
bad
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a bad
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idea
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 if you had small budget,
it
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they
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 can be available.
However
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, buying
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home
Correct article usage
a home
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 is save to you in future.

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task response
Write your main idea in a more clear way in each body part.
task response
Answer both parts in a balanced way: good points and bad points.
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Use examples that are simple and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Make one clear topic sentence for each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, however, and for example.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the one before it in a clear order.
task response
You answered both sides: advantages and disadvantages.
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You gave some examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used basic linking words like on one hand and on the other hand.
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