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A growing number of people work by telecommuting, that is, the employee work from home, using a computer and Internet to connect with the office. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working this way.

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Introduction
Nowdays
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,telecommuting and working from
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 become increasingly popular since 2019.One major advantage is that
employess
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employees
 can save both time and money because they do not travel to work every day.
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,companies can reduce their expenses by avoiding office rental costs and other workplace expenses.
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 the other hand,working from home
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 has some disadvantages.
people
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People
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 may have fewer opportunities for face-to-face communication and
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social interaction
,which can lead to feelings of isolation and loneliness. As
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a result
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 may negatively affect their mental health and
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 well-being.

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coherence cohesion
Add a short ending to sum up your view.
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Write a bit more to fully answer both good and bad sides.
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Use one clear main idea in each part and add one simple example.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like also, but, so, and because.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear good side and a clear bad side.
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Your ideas are on topic and easy to understand.
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You use simple cause and result well, like save time and feel alone.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • flexibility
  • productivity
  • cost savings
  • stress
  • convenience
  • environment
  • office
  • schedule
  • employee
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