The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The tables illustrate temperatures and hours of daylight across the
last
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weekend of the year in 2018, in two distinct metropolitan cities,
London
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and
Sydney
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. Degrees are in Celsius. What stands out the most from the data is the difference in
temperature
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between these two cities, as the weather is significantly warmer in
Sydney
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, peaking on
Sunday
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Sunday,
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30th at 31
°C
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. With regard to the time of daylight, days in
Sydney
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are much longer since the sun rises at a quarter before 6 A.
M
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. and the sunset is approximately at 8 P.
M
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. ,
while
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in
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london
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London
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it rises just after 8 A.
M
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. and
go
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goes
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down before 4 P.
M
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.
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Temperature
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Temperatures
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in
London
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are substantially colder than in
Sydney
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, plummeting
a
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minimum
temperature
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of 3
°C
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an
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and
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never exceeding a 15
°C
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threshold, peaking at 13
°C
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on Saturday 29th.
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Moreover
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it can be seen that
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temperature
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the temperature
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in
Sydney
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experiences a larger variation throughout the day, showing a gap of approximately 10
°C
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,
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in
London
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the gap is narrowed, standing in a range between 5
°C
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and 10
°C
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, temperature, °c, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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