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The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050.

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The line graph illustrate Chinese population in
difference
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different
group
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 of
age
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by started
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groups
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 from 1960 and including prediction to a year of 2050
Overall
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, it can be seen that a
group
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 of 70 is
highest
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the highest
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 of showed. Despite
of
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a
group
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 of 15 - 54
are
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going down from 1960 to 2050.
On the other hand
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,
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age
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the age
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group
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 of 0-14 are raising up and
increase
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increases
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 to 30
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2050. In
the
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detail, the
age
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 of
group
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 0 -14 by the forecast is staeady among 15
percent
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 in 50
years
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 peroid time and clime 25
percent
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 in 40
years
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 forcasst by approximately.
However
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, the highest is a
group
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 of 65
years
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 old plus, in the
percnetage
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percentage
 there is
extremely
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an extremely
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 raising up 35
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percent
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per cent
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 in 50
years
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 by 2020. Due
the
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to the
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 fact that, gradually fall
down
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by
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 20
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percent
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per cent
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 in 30
years
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forcast in
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by
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 2050. Moving on to the
group
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 of 15 - 64
years
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age
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old
.
from
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 the information we can see that slgihtly gone down
in
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every
10
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10-year
years
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 period
time
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apply
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. From the data that
siad
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said
, in every single year it
was decrease
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decreased by
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 10
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percent
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per cent
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 in the
meanwhile
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meantime
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 of
forecast
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the forecast
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, age, percent, years with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population
  • age group
  • forecast
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • fall
  • drop
  • decline
  • remain
  • stable
  • peak
  • reach a high point
  • the largest group
  • the smallest group
  • adult
  • children
  • older people
  • people aged 65 and over
  • people aged 15 to 64
  • people aged 0 to 14
  • over time
  • at the start
  • at the end
  • by 2050
  • from 1960 to 2050
  • is expected to
  • is projected to
  • a sharp rise
  • a steady fall
  • gradually
  • significantly
  • compared with
  • in contrast
  • while
  • overall
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