bar graph about the average weekly spending by families. Describe it.

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The bar chart compares the percentage of average weekly expenditure across
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eight
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in 1968 and 2018.
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, the
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proportion in 1968
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was the highest money consuming compare to others. There was a significant difference between
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and other categories
spending
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.
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, even
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leisure spending was the major consumption in 2018, there were two categories that
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and housing,
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a bit lower than
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respectively.
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the household golds stayed stable in each year. In 1968, the
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average spending accounted for 35%,
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with other categories, they can nıot debate with
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ratio.
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, they were equal and under the 10%.
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, housing and clothing spents were remained 10%. The lowest one was fuel spending that was just about 6%. In 2018, the proportion of leisure expenditure reached around 22%, which
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it the highest one.
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, the percentage of housing (about 18%),
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(16%) and
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transport
(14%)
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expenditures
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place respectively. Others stayed under 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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