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The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.

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The chart shows how much each age
group
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 in Britain gave to charity in 1990 and 2010. In 1990, giving money became more common as
people
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 got older, and it reached the highest point in the 36–50 age
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. After that, the rate fell a little for
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 aged 51–65 and fell more for those over 65. In 2010, the pattern was a bit different because the highest share was in the 51–65 age
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, not the middle
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. Young adults aged 18–25 gave the least in both years, and their rate fell strongly from 1990 to 2010.
People
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 aged 26–35 and 36–50
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 showed lower rates in 2010 than in 1990.
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, the 51–65
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 and the over-65
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 gave more in 2010 than in 1990.
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, older
people
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 were more likely to give money than younger
people
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 in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity = help for people in need
  • percentage = part out of one hundred
  • age group = people of the same age range
  • give money = donate
  • rose = went up
  • fell = went down
  • highest = biggest
  • lowest = smallest
  • peak = highest point
  • by contrast = in a different way
  • overall = in general
  • more likely = had a higher chance
  • younger people = people with lower age
  • older people = people with higher age
  • the figure for = the number/percentage for
  • reach a peak = get to the highest point
  • decline = go down slowly
  • increase = go up
  • compared with = looked at next to
  • in both years = in 1990 and 2010
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