The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games.

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The graph illustrates the number of medal wons at the Olympic Winter Games, ranking the 10 most successful countries from 1924 to 2018.
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, it is evident that Germany leads the ranking,
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almost 410
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won, strictly followed by Norway,
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Sweden stands at the bottom. The third most victorious nation is Russia, making up for 314
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won, most of them gold. Austria and Canada occupy the mid-cluster range, taking the fifth and the sixth place of the leaderboard relatively, but
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a stark contrast in gold medal
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wins
, with Canada
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Austria in
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category. With regard to Russia and
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of victories
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down, accounting for a gap of just under 10
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. Another interesting data
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stands out from the graph is that
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the rate of silver medals
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rate is higher than
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the rate of gold
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only in Finland and Austria.
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, it can be seen that only four nations exceed a 300 medal threshold,

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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words medals with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • medal counts
  • Olympic Games
  • gold medals
  • silver medals
  • bronze medals
  • rankings
  • notable achievements
  • distribution
  • performance trends
  • competition
  • athletic prowess
  • international competition
  • sportsmanship
  • winter sports
  • total medals
  • medal diversity
  • nation
  • summer games
  • dedication
  • excellence
  • training regimen
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