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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
These days,the government is more
intrested
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interested
 in public transportation
such
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 as buses and trains rather than the emergence of new
roads
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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buliding
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building
 new
roads
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 could increase the
economical
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economic
 growth.In my opinion,investing in public transportation contributes in heping the environment
which
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, which
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 is more
essentcial
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essential
.
Body · 1
On one hand,
buliding
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building
 new
roads
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 will aid in stimulating economic growth,
for example
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,connecting isolated areas with major cities will increase the market size,
thus
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,new
road
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roads
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 open up new customer
basis
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bases
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.
However
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,expanding the capacity will
draws
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draw
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 more drivers,and
in
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as a result
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results
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results,
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 the
cogestion
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congestion
 level will increase.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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,investing in public transport
such
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 as buses and trains significantly
help
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helps
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 the environment.By transporting many people at once,they reduce the number of individual cars on the road,which drastically
lower
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lowers
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 the gas
emission
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emissions
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,and
improve
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improves
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 the air quality.I believe that
this
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 advantage
outweigh
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outweighs
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 the disadvantages
due to
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 its contribution to society.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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buliding
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building
 new
roads
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 could be
benficial
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beneficial
 for economic growth,
but
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apply
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 it is not
important
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as important
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 as contributing to saving the environment.I believe
this
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 advantage strongly
outweigh
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outweighs
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 the disadvantage

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task response
Answer the main question more clearly. Say from the start why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
task response
Add one more clear bad point about public transport, then show why it is still less important.
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Use more direct examples to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph follow one simple plan: main idea, explanation, example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a careful way. Some parts now feel abrupt or not fully connected.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar so your ideas are easier to follow.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and keep it to the end.
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You discuss both sides of the topic, not only one side.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Words like on one hand, on the other hand, and in conclusion help guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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