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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

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The given tables compare data about the
number
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 of exchange
students
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 from universities in Europe to Australia in
two
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 different
years
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that France had relatively more
students
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 in
both
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years
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,
whereas
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 the total
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 in the second table demonstrated similar data. Regarding the first table, the total
numbers
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 were varied in
both
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 2007 and 2009(189 and 226). An identical figure was recorded in Netherland in
both
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years
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.
While
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 in 2007 Germany had 27
students
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, it almost doubled in 2009, reaching 62
students
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. France ,
on the other hand
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, showed almost exact
numbers
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 in these
two
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years
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. Similar
numbers
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 can be observed in Sweden and the UK in 2007,
while
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 the former showed 34,
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 latter demonstrated 31.
Nevertheless
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, Sweden increased its
number
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 of
students
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 from 34 to 42,
whereas
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 the UK decreased from 31 to 26. In terms of the second table, the total
numbers
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 shared matching data in
both
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 2007 and 2009.
Additionally
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, the UK and Netherland illustrated exactly the same
numbers
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 , which were 32.
However
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 in these
two
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 countries declined by the end of 2009. The opposite pattern was displayed in France and Germany, where these
two
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 countries experienced a noticeable increase in 2009. Sweden,
however
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, had 33
students
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 in 2007, but dropped to just 27
students
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 in 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, two, years, both, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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