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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given map illustrates two sites of the upcoming shopping centres in the area of Branfield
city
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which
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, which
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 are S1 and
S2
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S2,
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 that
had
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have
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 been proposed by
city
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 planners for the decision. All in all, from observing the provided information, both of the venues are located near the road, railway and the
city
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 centre. S1 is located closer to the housing estate
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while
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 S2 is located near the industrial estate.
Therefore
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, both of the sites are located far from the golf course and the park. First of all,
S1
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the S1
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 site is situated in the north sector of the
city
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below
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, below
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 the household area and above the
city
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 centre, showing the target of
this
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 mall as families. It is
also
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 surrounded by three modes of transportation
which
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, which
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 are the river, road and
railway
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railway,
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 that will be able to support the customers' transportation.
Secondly
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,
S2
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the S2
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 site is located in the southeast sector of Brandfield
below
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, below
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 the
city
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 centre and industrial estate,
presenting
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making
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 the target of
this
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 spot
as
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apply
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workers. The choices in transportation of the site are only road and railway
as
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, as
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 it is situated
further
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 from the river.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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