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The chart below shows the percentage of internet users by age group in Canada who shopped online in 2014 and 2018

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The bar chart compares the percentage of internet users in Canada, by
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group
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 , who shopped online in 2014 and 2018
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it is clear that
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 the 35–45
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group
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 had the highest proportion of online shoppers, at 38% in 2018
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the least proportion of the 65+
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group
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 accounted for 5% in 2014. As the table shows, in 2014, internet users shopped online 15-25
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group
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 was 20%,
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 a slight rise to 22%. Coming to the 26-35
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, people shopped online was 31% in2014, and it grew slowly to 33% in 2018. Regarding the
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 35-45 , which was 28% in 2014, after that,
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 figure increased dramatically in 2018.
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 45-55
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group
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 were 21% and 27%, in 2014 and in 2018, respectively.
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, the 55-65
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 generation shopped more in 2018 than in 2014. Coming to the soon-to-be figure, the 65+
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 was 5% in 2014,
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 increased slightly to 11%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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