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The graphs below show where people first got their news, both about the world and about local events, between 1987 and 1997. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graphs compare the
sources
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 of international
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 and local
news
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 in
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 United Kingdom between 1987 and 1997. The
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 were mainly from
television
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,
newspaper
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 and
radio
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. In general, the citizens acquired global
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 primarily from
television
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,
while
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 they obtained local
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 mostly from
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newspaper
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newspapers
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.
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, the number of
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selected
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television
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 as a dominant source of both world and local
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had
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 been increasing. Meanwhile, a choice of
radio
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 was the least
option
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popular option
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 as both types of
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,
respresenting
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representing
 around 10% of the UK residents. The dominant worldwide
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 resource was from
television
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, which was almost
tripled
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 that of the number of
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 compared to
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newspaper
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newspapers
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, quadrupled that of
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, which meant the choice of
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 represented around 65% to 67% residents in the period.
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, both options of
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 and
radio
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 remained stable over the years, with approximately 20% to 25% choosing
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 and 9% using
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. In terms of
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 of local
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, a noticeable fluctuation in options was evident
especially
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 the shift from
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 to
television
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 across the decade, which meant there was a significant rise with almost double the amount of
people
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 choosing TV, from 19% to 37%.
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, choosing domestic
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 peaked in 1987 and bottomed out in 1997.
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 the end of the period, the percentages of
people
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 choosing newspapers compared to
television
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 were similar, with about 40% each.
On the other hand
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, the option of
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leveled
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 off.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, news, television, newspaper, radio, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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