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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the number of US families by annual
income
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 in
three
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years
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, namely: 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
figure
Correct subject-verb agreement
figures
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 for less than $25
thousand
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, $25
thousand
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 - $50
thousand
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 and $ 100.000 or more
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 higher than
other
Correct pronoun usage
the others
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.
In addition
Linking Words
,
annual
Correct article usage
the annual
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income
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 of $75
thousand
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 to about 100
thousand
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 dollars is the smallest
than
Change preposition
of
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 all
three
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years
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. In the 3 higher
income
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, about 25
thousand
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 to 49.999 is higher than 25
thousand
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around
Punctuation problem
, around
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 two
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
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 households in
three
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years
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. Annual
income
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at 100.000
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of 100,000
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 or more is higher than all but in 2011
is
Correct pronoun usage
it is
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 about 28
millions
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million
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, so it’s smaller than
two
Correct article usage
the two
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 figures. In the other incomes, the data of
income
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 $50
thousand
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 to $74.999 is more than $75 thousands to about 100
thousand
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 in
three
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years
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around
Punctuation problem
, around
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 7
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
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 US households.
In addition
Linking Words
, annual
income
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 of $75
thousand
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 to about $100
thousand
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 is the smallest
than all
Correct word choice
apply
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of
data
Correct determiner usage
all the data
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, three, years, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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