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Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. Provide specific reason and examples to support your answeriety?

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In recent times, importing
food
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world wide
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worldwide
 is
practiced
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 by many
countries
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. The main disadvantage of importing
food
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 is that it compromises the freshness of the product,
while
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principle
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 advantage is that people get a whole variety of edibles and essentials at their doorstep without needing to go in search for it to a different country.
This
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 essay agrees that
advantages
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the advantages
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outweighs
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outweigh
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 the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.
Firstly
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, providing
an
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imported
eatables
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food items
 by compromising the freshness of the product because of the transportation time is the main demerit. When collecting and transporting the
food
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 items from one country to another takes plenty of time
which
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 can cause an early expiry period of the product.
This
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 can lead to various health issues if not examined correctly.
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, the extended option of
food
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 variety for people who are unable to visit other
countries
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are
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is
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 one of the major
advantage
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advantages
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 of imported
food
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. People who are not able to travel because of financial problems
finds
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find
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this
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 option very useful.
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Also
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 in
countries
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 with extreme weather
conditions
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conditions,
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faces difficulty to cultivate the
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cultivating
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 crops in
such
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areas
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areas,
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 imported
food
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 products
plays
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play
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 a major role.
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, in
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 with extreme winter it is difficult to grow nutritious crops
and
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 they have to completely rely on imported
food
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. Another major advantage is that it helps to maintain
a
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good professional
relation
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 with the
neighboring
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neighbouring
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countries
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. In conclusion,
although
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 imported
food
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 compromises in maintaining freshness than home grown products, the extended variety of
food
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 and the nutritious benefits of a well grown crops
outweighs
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 the
demerit
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demerits
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.

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task response
Answer both sides in a more even way. You talk more about the good side than the bad side.
coherence and cohesion
Give clearer main ideas in each body paragraph. One paragraph should have one main point.
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Use more clear and specific examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and for example.
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Explain your points more fully. Some ideas are good but not fully developed.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects clearly to the one before it.
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You answered the topic and gave both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use one example about cold countries, which helps your answer.
coherence and cohesion
The main opinion is clear: you think the advantages are stronger.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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