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Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? What could the government do to reduce this problem?

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In
todays
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today's
 world Large
cities
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 are facing a serious problem in
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 congestion.
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examine
 the reason
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 issue and how it can be solved . One major reason
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 problem is
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flexibility
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time
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. As it
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 in big
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facing
 a huge number of people who
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 to go to
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 and they are all starting at the same
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even school students therefor,
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the streets
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 are
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crowded .
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a flixeabilety
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flexibility
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every one
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everyone
 has to start and finish their
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 at the same
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time
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 it will be so
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helpful
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reduce
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 jam in large
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 . For
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,
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if
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 the government put a rule for the people who
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 to finish their
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 in 8 hours without a
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specific
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 to start and
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finish,
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 it will help to reduce the
traffic
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 congestion . In conclusion,
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I think
 the large
cities
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 are
faceing issus
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facing issues
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 as
traffic
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 jam is because there is no
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flexibility
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time
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 and by
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scheduling
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time
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 in an
effecive
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effective
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 it will
defenatily
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definitely
 reduce the
traffic
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 congestion.

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task response
Task response: You answer both parts of the question, but you give only one main cause and one main way to fix it. Add one more cause and one more government action.
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Task response: Your main idea is clear, but some parts are too general. Explain why flexible time helps, and how the government can make this plan work.
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Task response: Your example is linked to the topic, but it is simple. Add a more clear and real example, such as buses, trains, or parking rules.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. This is good. But some ideas are not fully developed, so the reader wants more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words more carefully. You use words like 'for example' and 'in conclusion', which is good, but some sentences are long and hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Make each paragraph have one clear main idea. The second paragraph is about the cause, and the third is about the fix, which is good, but support each idea with one more point.
task response
Task response: You answer both questions in the task, so the essay stays on the topic.
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Task response: Your main solution matches your cause, so your ideas connect well.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You have an introduction and a conclusion, and this helps the essay feel complete.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your paragraphs are in a logical order, so the reader can follow your ideas.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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