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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their houses rather than buy their housees. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Tenancy is preferred over property ownership by most individuals in various parts of the world,
due to
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 many reasons including the costs and
requiements
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requirements
 of tenants. In
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the
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 benefits and drawbacksof renteing.
One
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 of the primary advantages of lease
conratcts
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contracts
 is that
,
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 the owner is the
one
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 responsible for the
maintanace
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maintenance
 and repairs
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, which
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 will spare the leasee much
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 and
cost
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.
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Moreover
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 the house will be
move in
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move-in
 ready, waiting for
contarctors
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contractors
 and workers to finish, which will require
alot
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a lot
 of patience.
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Furthermore
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 the building will be easy to
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give up
 any time under any circumstances occured to the renter, no
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 attached, the
contarct
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contract
 could be
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.
On the other hand
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, there is alot of disadvantages related to tenancy
contarcts
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contracts
,
one
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 of them is
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that, in
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 many cases, monthly rental payments are almost equivalent to the
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 of a mortgage installment,
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consequently instaed
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instead
 of paying into an asset, the rent amount is considered an expense.
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,
according to
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 renting laws, the
cost
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 of rent should be increased by a certain rate annually
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as a
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result
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result,
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 the rent expenses are never
fixed
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a fixed
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 amount
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its
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 always an increasing
cost
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.
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, many landlords prohibit tenants from altering the property, preventing renters from truly
personalizing
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 their living space. In conclusion, different humans have different beliefs, the
dicision
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decision
 of buying vs renting varies from
one
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 another, but in general,
one
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 should consider the benefits of buying a home alongside the possible disadvantages of owning your home too. Weighing up the pros and cons of buying will help you choose which is best for you
buying
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: buying
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 or renting.

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Answer both sides more fully. You wrote some good points, but the bad side needs one more clear idea or example.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main ideas easier to follow. Start each body paragraph with one clear topic sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like first, also, however, and finally. Do not join too many ideas in one long sentence.
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Give short real life examples. For example, say a renter can move fast for a new job, or rent may go up each year.
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Keep your conclusion focused on renting. Do not change to buying too much at the end.
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You answered the question and wrote about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, body, and ending.
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Some ideas are relevant, such as repair costs, easy moving, and rising rent.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rent a home
  • buy a house
  • housing cost
  • move easily
  • save money
  • low income
  • middle income
  • repair work
  • the owner
  • monthly rent
  • build wealth
  • long-term plan
  • rent goes up
  • feel stable
  • have less control
  • make changes
  • live near family
  • new job
  • surprise costs
  • a sense of home
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