Your local public library wants to make improvements to there services & facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to librarian in your letter - describe what you like about the library - say what you don't like - make suggessions for improvements

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Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you regarding my suggestions to improve the services and facilities in the
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firstly
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, I would like to share the good facilities in our
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which
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not
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to
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First
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one is the
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of
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the shelf. As the
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are arranged in a perfect manner , people can easily
identiy
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identify
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no time. Another facility is
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the variety of
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is facilitated with
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collections
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of
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. There is a wide range of
historic
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historical
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and novels , so
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students or people who pursue their career on historic fileds
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will help. Despite the advantages, the
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a problem
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the
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librarian
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librarians
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if
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a smart and
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well-educated
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is
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then
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it will be helpful for the people
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who come
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to the
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to search and find their
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interested
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immediately.
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, the
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is lacking advanced
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can learn and understand
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the current trendy
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available in the markets which are helpful for the stuents
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professionals. So advanced
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will be available
everytime
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every time
in the
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thanks of expertised
librarian
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. I hope you
would
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will
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consider my suggestions and take
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the necessary
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actions to advance our
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facilities. I look forward to hearing from you,
yours
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faithfully. Rahul

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task response
Answer all parts with clear detail. You said what you like, what you do not like, and gave ideas, but some parts need clearer support.
task response
Use a more polite and steady letter style. Write to the librarian in a formal way from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a clearer order. Each paragraph should have one main point and easy links between points.
coherence and cohesion
Check opening and closing form. Use capitals in 'Firstly' and 'Yours faithfully' and keep the style neat.
task response
You covered all three bullet points in the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear beginning, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You used more than one paragraph, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
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