Some people believe that individual citizens should take primary responsibility for reducing waste and protecting the environment. Others argue that large corporations and governments should be the ones to enforce and manage these changes.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a controversial issue whether the
government
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or
individuals
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should have the responsibility for protecting the
environment
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.
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some
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argue
citizens
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should have social responsibility for their living conditions, I
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that the
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should
also
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amend the
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to protect the
environment
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. The
government
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have the power to mandate green policies and punish heavy polluters.
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, the
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could amend a
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to ban all
plastic
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wastes
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waste
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.
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could lead most of the
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to give up
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tableware and
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bags.
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that, if stores or
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go against
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the
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, offenders will be subject to a fine or imprisonment.
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shows that the
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have the
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right
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to set up laws to prevent
pollutions
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pollution
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and punish polluters.
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, if politicians do not support the
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,
citizen
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citizens
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will not either. It is believed that the
government
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a huge impact
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society
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society,
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whether it’s amending a
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or supporting the 'green action'.
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,
individuals
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should make small decisions in their daily routine.
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,
while
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shopping,
citizens
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should replace
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bags
to
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their own shopping bag,
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, close the air conditioner before leaving the house or refuse to use
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tablewares. These kinds of small decisions can improve
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living conditions. If no one is willing to make changes, global warming and air pollution will get worse than before.
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shows that, if
citizens
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won't
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don't
make changes to take social responsibilities, their living
environment
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will be poor and terrible.
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,
citizens
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should take
first
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priority
for
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reducing
wastes
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waste
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and protecting their own living conditions.
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,
while
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the
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should amend the
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to protect the
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and
penalize
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penalise
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individuals
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which
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who
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go against it.
However
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,
citizens
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should
also
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take
their
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apply
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responsibility to protect their living
environment
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by making small changes in their daily lives. I believed that when
citizens
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and the
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cooperate together, the impact will be much
more
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stronger than
only
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if only
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one side
are doing
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does
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their job.

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task response
Answer both sides in a more equal way. Your view is there, but it changes a little in the end.
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Make your opinion very clear in the introduction and keep the same view in the whole essay.
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Explain your main ideas more. Some points are good, but they need one more step of support.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'because', and 'as a result' in a careful way.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea words too much, like 'protect the environment' and 'living conditions'. Use simple other words.
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You discuss both the role of the government and the role of people.
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You give real examples, like plastic bags and air conditioner use.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas follow a clear order from one sentence to the next.
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