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To meet the growing need for food by an increasing population, a country should make use of genetically engineered foods. However, some people believe that such foods are not only unhealthy but affect the nature too. Discuss both the viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Many individuals think that to match the growth of
population
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the population
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, the
government
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 should make use of genetically modified
foods
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,
whereas
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 I believe these kinds of
foods
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 can harm both people and the environment. On the one hand, the
government
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 should produce more modified food
due to
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 increasing of number of citizens. Engineered
foods
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is
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are
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 considered more affordable than original food.
As a result
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, the
government
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 can make more food and invest in other areas,
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 as developing the infrastructure of
transportation
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the transportation
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 system.
This
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 action will contribute to
improve
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 the country's situation.
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, if the ministry starts
utilizing of
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utilising
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 genetically engineered
foods
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, these
foods
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 will negatively impact
on
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apply
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both civilians and
the
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apply
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nature. Nature might be affected by
this
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 strategy because it changes the structure of plants,
for instance
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, shortening their
lifetime
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life expectancy
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. I firmly believe that the
government
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 should not make genetically engineered
foods
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. In conclusion,
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 there are benefits
of
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to
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 making genetically engineered products,
this
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 strategy has many disadvantages
on
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for
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 the environment.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Now you talk more about the bad side than the good side.
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Give your own view in a clear way and keep it the same from start to end.
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Add one or two clear examples to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: intro, one paragraph for each side, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Connect ideas with simple linking words like 'First', 'Also', 'However', and 'For example'.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and explain it well.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing and some basic linking words.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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