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You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities  of its own.Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club.In your letter. •introduce yourself •say why you are interested this sports club •ask some questions about the club facilities, members, costs

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Dear Sir, I am
first-year
Correct article usage
a first-year
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 student at a local college

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task response
Write all three parts: who you are, why you want the club, and your questions.
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Add more detail. One line is not enough for the task.
coherence and cohesion
Use a full letter form with opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each part of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
You started with a polite opening.
task response
You gave your student status clearly.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to introduce myself.
  • I have recently started a course at the college.
  • My college does not have sports facilities of its own.
  • I am interested in joining your sports club.
  • I would like to keep fit and stay healthy.
  • Your club is the nearest one to my college.
  • Could you tell me what facilities you have?
  • Do you have a gym, a pool, or sports courts?
  • I would also like to know about your members.
  • Are students and beginners welcome?
  • Could you please send me information about the costs?
  • Is there a joining fee or student discount?
  • I look forward to your reply.
  • Thank you for your time.
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