The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of English- and French-
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teachers
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recruited in Ontario between 2001 and 2007, with figures   measured in percentages .From an
overall
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perspective ,French-
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teachers
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experienced an upward trend ,
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the figure for 
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teachers
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  declined significantly over the period .Notably , French
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teachers
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which
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surpassed  English
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teachers
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teachers,
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  thereby emerging as the dominant  figure in
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the end of the period .  The figure for English-
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teachers
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stood at approximately 73% in 2001  and  experienced  a dramatic decline to 40% in 2003, before rising from 40% to 45% between 2003 and 2005. 
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, dropped to 25%
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of the period .
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, French
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began at around  70% in 2001 and  fluctuated between 2001 and 2003  .Meanwhile , increased gradually from 68% to 70% in 2003 and 2005 .It
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climbed to a peak of 75% in 2007.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steady increase
  • growing demand
  • notable decline
  • budget cuts
  • student enrollment
  • temporary stabilization
  • policy adjustments
  • economic improvements
  • post-2005
  • long-term educational strategies
  • recruitment needs
  • budgetary restraints
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