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Band 2.5

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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, Authorities they want
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money
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, some
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 people believe that they agree with governments to put
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but
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 other people
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disagree
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sitiuation
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situation
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 , many people especially on europe , they
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railways
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 , because they dont have a car to
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 the vehicles its too expensive to purchase,
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, the gasoline price is very high on europe, but , the
railways
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 now obsolete to
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 , they should enhance the
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 it or improve the
roads
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 is why governments they spend fee on
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 , the
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its
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significatn
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significant
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railways
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roads
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 specifically
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nowadays
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on middle east
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they
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 cars more than
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due to the
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 gasoline has a reasonable price
,
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railways
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now are
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are now
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 almost extinct
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 they now
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 the modren vehicles because now the
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 is very ancient to
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 on modren life. In conclusion ,
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 my opinion i prefer the government
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roads
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instead
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 of
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due to its
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because it is
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 more comfortable
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in
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is
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 saving more
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i
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roads
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Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same view in the full essay.
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Add main ideas with better support. Explain why rail is good or why roads are good with one clear reason in each body paragraph.
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Use simple real examples. For example, say rail can carry many people in big cities, while roads help cars and trucks reach small towns.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main point only. This will help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words in a natural way, such as First, Also, However, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts change idea too fast, so add short explanation between them.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This is a good essay shape.
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You answered the topic and gave your own opinion in the end.
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You tried to compare railways and roads in different places, which shows some range of ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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