There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems Explain how these problems are affecting the public Suggest some changes that could be made.

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Dear manager of the transport company, I am Fatemeh Shafiei; I am writing you
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letter to inform you about an issue that has been going on for some time on King
Stree
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Street
. It has been two weeks since the first time that the early morning
bus
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that
stop
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at 13 station was late for half an hour.
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bus
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was supposed to be there at 7:30 AM,
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it was at
station
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the station
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at 8:00 AM, and
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is consistantly
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happening since
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. At
first
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I thought there was a change in the
bus
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schedule, so I called
transportation
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the transportation
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center,
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centre. However
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however
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, they told me that there is no
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change,
so
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apply
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I explained the situation, and they said they
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investigate.
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,
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is still happening, and the
bus
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schedule is still the same on your website. I am sure you understand that
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is a really serious problem.
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not only
affect
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affects
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the people as they arrive late to their work, but
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makes the
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station crowded, which
somethimes
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sometimes
even
affect
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affects
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the pedestrians.
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, when the
bus
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finally
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arrives, there are too many people waiting for it that it takes
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a long
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time for them to enter the
bus
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, and it
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affects the traffic. I really hope that you can
clearify
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clarify
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situation; add a
bus
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for 7:30 AM, or update the schedule as
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problem is really harming the community and public safety in
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area. Thank you for your consideration, Looking forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Fatemeh Shafiei

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one more clear change to make your ideas stronger.
task response
Task response: Use a more formal style, for example 'I am writing to report a problem' instead of some casual lines.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some sentences are too long. Make them shorter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use small linking words like 'first', 'also', and 'therefore' to connect ideas more clearly.
task response
Task response: You clearly describe the problem, its effect on people, and give changes.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph mostly has one main idea.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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