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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps
decribe
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describe
 the
lay out
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layout
 of the industrial
area
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 in the town of Norbiton and change of it after redevelopment in the
future
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.
Overall
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, the
area
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 will be
expand
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expanded
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 to
construction
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include construction
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 facilities
as
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such as
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school
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schools
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,
playground
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playgrounds
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, medical
centre
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centres
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,
shops
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and shops
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. Factories will
be
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apply
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make way for housing.
Factory
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The factory
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 will
be
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apply
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make way for
housings
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housing
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 after redevelopment. To the main path, from the northern riverside
adding
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 two housing. In the planned
future
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, the right
area
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more crowded better
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will be more crowded, while
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 the left same industrial
area
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 now. Adding a school in the right
area
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.
Next
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 the school is a playground, it
had
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has
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 been built between two
housings
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housing blocks
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. Near the
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center
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centre
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, the present is
a
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an
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 empty space
but
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, but
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 in the
future
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will
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it will
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 be
medical
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a medical
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center
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centre
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 to sevice for citizens
neibogh
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of the neighbourhood
. In the opposite medical
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center
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centre
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 in the
future
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is
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are
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 the shops. Now, the farmland is opposite the main road
but
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, but
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 after
redevelopment
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redevelopment,
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 the farmland will be relocated to the
east
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eastern
area
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. It
so
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is so
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 far
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center
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in the centre
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area
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.
Street
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The street
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 will be
expand make to
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expanded to make it
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 convenient for
citizen
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citizens
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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