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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The maps illustrate the
change
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changes
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 made
of
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to
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 a
compus
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campus
 site between 2004 and 2024. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is immediately evident that there have been
a
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significant changes
about
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in
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 the population of the students, the
added
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addition
 of a new
school
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 building and a car park, the construction of a new road, which
providing
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provides
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 more modern facilities in
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school
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the school
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. Looking at the chart in detail, in 2004, there were two
school
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 buildings on the north- west side, and it connected
with
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by
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 a path
,
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; also,
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also
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 there was a car park close to the entrance.
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, there was a huge sports
field
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 in
north-east
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the north-east
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. By 2024, it
ahve
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will have
 been a notably expanation of a
school
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 building 3, which replaced the
school
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field
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. If we look at
sports
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the sports
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field
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, it
relocated
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has been relocated
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 to the north-east corner close to the wooden area and reduce the size
about
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by about
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 half.
While
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 a new road can be
notice
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noticed
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 through the centre and
increased
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apply
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a new car park on the end of the road, next to the
school
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 building 3. There was a negligibel increased is a building linking the
school
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building
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buildings
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 2 and 3 . The largely
unchange
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unchanged
 is the wooded area, it only
removed
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been removed
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 slightly for
sports
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a sports
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field
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, field with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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