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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

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The table illustrates the percentages of elderly
people
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 aged 65 and above in three
countries
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 over a 42-year
period
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 from 1988 to 2030.
Overall
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, the percentage of elderly
people
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 increased in all
countries
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 except the
UK
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, which saw a significant
increase
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 in the
last
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period
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 of the table.
Canada
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 and
Germany
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 showed a consistent
increase
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 throughout the
period
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. Looking at the details,
Canada
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 and
Germany
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 experienced substantial growth in the proportion of
people
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 aged 65 and over between 1988 and 2030. Between 1988 and 2000, both
countries
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 witnessed comparable increases, rising from 16.32% to 26.35% and 20.45% to 30.42%, respectively.
thereafter
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, The figure rose steadily,
whereas
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Germany
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 consistently recorded a higher percentage than
Canada
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. By the end of the
period
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, both
countries
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 are shown to have reached their peak levels , approximately 26.35% AND 30.42% , respectively. For the
UK
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,
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 figure of the
UK
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 showed a slight
increase
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 and was followed by a sharp rise in the percentage of elderly
people
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 aged 65 and over between 1988 and 2030. Between 1988 and 2000, the
UK
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 proportions rose marginally from 14.23 to 14.89 , and
then
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 from 2000 to 2030 significant
increase
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 from 14.89 to 20.35.
However
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, the figure
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 the
UK
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 remains lower than that of
Canada
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 and
Germany
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, period, uk, increase, canada, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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