The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart provides information about science qualification organized by people in
Malaysia
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and
Singapore
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.
Overall
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, no qualifications in science represent the highest proportion in both countries,
while
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master's
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a master's
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degree
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was the least chosen.
To begin
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with, the chart compare between four different types of degrees in two Asian countries.
Precentage
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Percentage
of school leaving exams and no qualifications in
sience
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science
in
Malaysia
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were
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was
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higher than
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Singapore
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in Singapore
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.
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however
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However
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;
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,
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bachelor's
degree
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outweigh the data of
Malaysia
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by double
in
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the
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rate. In terms of the lowest
degree
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taken by both
countries
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countries'
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population
which
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, which
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was
master's
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a master's
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degree
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. Meanwhile,
The
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the
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average rate was under five
percent
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per cent
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. The ratio of school leaving the exams in
malaysia
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around 36% top the
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singapore
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Singapore
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number by almost 5%
while
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,
no qualification in science difference
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while the difference in no qualification in science
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was approximately the same.
Singapore
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bachelor taker percentage was 10% more than
individuals
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that of individuals
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in
Malaysia
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. Masters was the only type of
degree
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was
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that was
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equal in both
civilizations
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civilisations
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, singapore, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • qualification
  • science
  • people
  • country
  • degree
  • diploma
  • certificate
  • number
  • compare
  • difference
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trends
  • education
  • job
  • market
  • system
  • total
  • percentage
  • feature
  • report
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