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The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.

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1.The proportion of those satisfied
of
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 technical quality at the
university
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 decreased from 65% in 2000 to 63% in 2005, but had risen to 69% by 2010. 2. The percentage of those print resources at the
university
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 increased between 87% in 2000 and 89% in 2005.
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 had gone down to 88% in 2010. 3. The rate of those Electronic Resources at the
university
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gone
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 up from 45%, 72%, 88% given in years 4. The ratio of those
range
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ranges
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 of modules offered dipped between 32% in 2000, 30% in 2005 and 27% in 2010. 5. The proportion of those building\teaching Facilities stay stable at the
university
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 in three years 2000,2005,2010.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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