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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the average
carbon
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 dioxide
emissions
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 in four different nations
at
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over
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 a certain time
period
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 (1967 and 2007)
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, the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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 was recorded
fisrt
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first
 place for having
a
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high CO2
emissions
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 in
early
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the early
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 years, and
leter
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later
 declined over the
period
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 .
Whereas
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,
Sweeden incresed
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Sweden increased
 over the first few years and
then
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 fluctuated over the
period
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.
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,
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 the other two
countires
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countries'
carbon
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emissions
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 rate increased over the years. The
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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 had a very high score of
the
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carbon
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emissions
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 at 11% in 1967 and slightly
decresed
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decreased
 in 1977 till 2007 at 9% of
emissions
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.
However
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,
Sweeden
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Sweden
 experienced a similar situation to the UK, in 1967 its proportion was at 8
%
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then
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 it reached its peak point at 10% in 1977 and continued to
decrese
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decrease
 afterwards till it reached 5% in 2007.
In contrast
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, Italy represented 4% of
carbon
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emissions
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 per person in 1967 and exceeded a slight
increse
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increase
 in 1977 at 6%, afterwards the score fluctuated till it reached 7% in 2007.
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, Portugal observed the lowest figure of CO2
emissions
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among all three nations at 1% in 1967.The rate increased over the
period
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 till it grew substantially at 4% in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, emissions, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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