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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000.

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This
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 table illustrates the
main three different
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three main
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 ways
of
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in which
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 the police
distributed the
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distribute
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 cash,
whereas
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 the pie charts indicate the
money
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utilization
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utilisation
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 from 2017 to 2018. There are main
categerios
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categories
 of
money
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 income
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 national government, local taxes, other sources, for
an
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apply
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example
grants
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, grants
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.
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, cash
used
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is used
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 for salaries for employees, technology,
and
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apply
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buildings and transport services.
Overall
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, there was
marginal
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a marginal
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 increased of each
sources
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source
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 of
money
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 allocated by
police
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the police
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, more
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more than
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compared to
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 higher figures in 2018, when compared to 2017. The
most higest
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highest
 saved source was
national
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the national
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 government, but the lowest
money
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 assignment
from
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was from
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 other sources. When
considered
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considering
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 the
money
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 expenditures, there were significant fluctuations
in
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apply
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between building and transport in the table.
Likewise
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, local taxes
granted up
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amounted
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 to 102.03 million
in
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apply
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pounds, which was the highest income from
national
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the national
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 government in 2018.
However
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,
for
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apply
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the salaries spent marginally decreased from 75 % to 69% proportion. Notably, there was a buildings and transport
stayed
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, which stayed
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same
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the same
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 as 17%. Regardless, technology smoothly
flow
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flowed
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 and recoreded modest difference from 8% to 14% increased.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginal" was used 2 times.
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