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Band 4.5

tn the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is sometimes proposed that online
sources
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 of
information
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 will be used by people for reading purposes
which
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, which
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 will be free of cost,rather than purchasing
books
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 and newspapers in
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apply
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printed form. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
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 absolutely seems to be happening in the near future. In today's
fast paced
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fast-paced
 and digital
world
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world,
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 where every piece of
information
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 is only one click away from us,
readers
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 have become used to getting the
news
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 on their smart screens.
Firsly
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Firstly
,it is an
effecient
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efficient
 way of getting
latest
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the latest
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news
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 and updates of what's happening all over the world, rather than waiting a whole day for newspapers to arrive on their doorsteps and provide them with the same
information
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.
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 of the
news
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 broadcasters and channels have
also
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 gone online
providing
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, providing
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 instant
news
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 to the consumers.
Most
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The most
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 number of
books
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 which are available online have to be bought through paid
sources
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.So these
books
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 have not become absolutely free yet.I am not seeing it happening in the upcoming years.Another benefit that online
readers
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 get is that they don't always have to
carrye
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carry
 bulky
books
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 and magazines in order to enjoy them.
On the contrary
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,
readers
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 who have been using traditional ways of
sources
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 don't find it amusing or entertaining to go to a website and read via their screens. These people argue that
real
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the real
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 essence of
story
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a story
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 or a novel
could not
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cannot
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 be enjoyed if it is not printed on paper.
This
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 group mostly includes our
elder
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older
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 generation who have been brought up by reading
books
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 traditionally on paper. In conclusion, I believe that newspapers are likely to become less popular as online
sources
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 provide faster and more convenient access to
information
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.
However
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, printed
books
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 may continue to exist because many
readers
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 still prefer the traditional reading experience and because much online content is not available free of charge.

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task response
Give one clear answer all through the essay. At first you say yes, but later you say books may still stay. Make your view clear from start to end.
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Answer all parts of the question in a balanced way. Talk about newspapers and books in separate clear parts.
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Add more clear support for your main ideas. Explain why free online reading will or will not replace printed books.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more clearly with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and joined too fast. Break them into shorter parts for better flow.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a clear conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing, and this helps the reader follow your ideas.
task response
You give relevant ideas about online news being fast and easy to get.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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