Education is a critical element of the prosperity of any nation. The more educated people in a country are, the more successful their nation becomes.” Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement. Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.

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teach
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Give a clearer answer in the first paragraph. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Add one main idea in each body paragraph and explain it more.
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Use simple and real examples that clearly match your point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, for example, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph stay on one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the one before in a clear order.
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You answered the topic and gave your opinion.
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You included examples about work and school.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like moreover, additionally, and therefore.
Fully explain your ideas

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