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Band 2.5

Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear a uniform at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Wearing a uniform at
work
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 is
a
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apply
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mandatory for some companies ,
special
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such as
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 banks . There are many people
think
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who think
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 it restricts the options for what they like to wear
,
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.
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 In my opinion , I agree
with
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that
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 the uniform must be obligible not optional
to
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, for
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 everyone . Waking up
everyday
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every day
 and choosing what
should I
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to wear
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waer
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 it takes
many
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a lot of
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time
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, as
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. As
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 a
girl
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girl,
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 it
is
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does
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 not take
time
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 only
but
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also
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it
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puts me in a situation of thinking more and being more distracted to choose something I
did
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have
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 not
wear it
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worn
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 before
, it
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. It
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 consumes a part of
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time
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my time
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 and energy to
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waer
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wear
 the final outfit
,
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.
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regardless
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Regardless of
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 how expensive for buynig more clothes.
According to
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 men , it is less
issuable
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stressful
, at any rate it takes more
time
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 for both .
Furthermore
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 , there
many
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are many
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 people
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waer
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wearing
 something not
sutiable
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suitable
 for the
work
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 place , waring a uniform adds a
part
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sense
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 of commitment and regulations to the
work
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,
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;
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 seeing many
colors
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colours
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 and strange clothes
it
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apply
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is not tidy
and
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, and
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 it shows how random the place is.
Despite
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Although
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 it is
confortable
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comfortable
 for
every
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everyone
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 to
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waer
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wear
 what they want and it
definates
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defines
 that everyone has
a
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the
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 freedom of decision , but they
get
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make
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 that
outside
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choice outside
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the
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of
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work
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 , and it saves
more
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them more time
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time
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 for them.

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task response
Answer the question more fully. Say why you agree, and also talk a little about the other side.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer main ideas for each part. Put one main point in one paragraph.
task response
Add simple examples to support your ideas, like office rules, team image, or saving money and time.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, however, and in the end to help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Write a stronger end. Repeat your opinion in a clear way.
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Your opinion is clear. You agree with work uniforms.
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You give more than one reason, like saving time and making the workplace look tidy.
coherence and cohesion
You have an opening paragraph and a short ending.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional image
  • build trust
  • company identity
  • customer confidence
  • sense of equality
  • social pressure
  • personal style
  • freedom of choice
  • easy to identify
  • workplace safety
  • public-facing job
  • smart appearance
  • team spirit
  • practical clothing
  • clean and tidy
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