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The bar chart below shows the percentages of the total world population in four countries.

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This
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 bar chart compares four regions in terms of
population
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 between 1950 and 2050.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 four regions experienced different trends in the time period.
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India's
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population
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 was 15% in 1950
and
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, and
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 it increased rapidly to almost 17% in 2002. Afterwards, it is expected to increase steadily 19% in 2050.
While
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population
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the population
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 of India keeps getting increased in
2050
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2050,
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 it is predicted
it
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that it
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 will decrease significantly to exact 15% in China and to only 1% in Japan.
Similarly
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, in
USA
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the USA
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 total
population
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is
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was
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 around 7% in
1950
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1950,
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whereas
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 it steadily declined to only 5% in 2002. Afterwards,
this
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 figure will remain at the same 5% in 2050. As the bar chart
shows
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shows,
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 only
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India's
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population
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 will increase after 1950.
However
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, in China,
USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
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Japan,
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 it
rather will
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will rather
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 fall gradually
overtime
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over time
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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