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Your Next Door neighbor often listens to loud music late at night. Because of the loud music , you often have problems sleeping. Write a letter to the authority of the building. In your letter Describe the situation Explain the problems it is causing you. Propose a solution to the problem

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to formally express my deep concerns regarding my
neighbours
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neighbour's
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 behaviour of listening to music at a very high volume. It has been several days
I
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since I
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have been experiencing the loud
noise
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 that often comes from our neighbours' house. Since I spend most of my time at my workplace, when I arrive home late at night, there is always the
noise
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 of deafening music
thst
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that
 comes from the
residents
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residents'
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 property living next to my home.
Due to
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 the
noise
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 pollution, I have trouble sleeping at night. The loud
noise
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 of
bass
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the bass
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 and the high music causes
the
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 disturbance
that is
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 quite problematic reslting in the catalyst of disturbed sleep.
Albiet
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Albeit
 I tried to talk to them regarding the situation, their stubborn attitude made them close their dorrs at my face. I would like you to kindly look into
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 matter and resolve it at your earliest convenience.
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, I tried to put forth my request
infront
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in front
 of them
,
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however
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, it didn't make them
to
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even think about the
neighbours
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neighbours'
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 rights. I would like you to kindly warn them for their misbehaviour
and
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, and
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 even if
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they
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 don't promptly act on it, the written legal notice should be issued icluding the heavy penalty. I am looking forward to
recieving
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receiving
 a positive response from your side. Yours sincerely, Ameera.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not clear. Say the problem in a more direct way.
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Task response: Your solution is strong, but it is a bit too hard. You can first ask the building office to give a warning.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some sentences are too long and hard to follow. Use shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some linking is not smooth. Use simple link words like 'because', 'so', and 'however'.
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You clearly say why you are writing.
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You explain the sleep problem well.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphs, and this helps the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Your opening and closing are polite and suitable.
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