2024)Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town, and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. In your letter, explain: why you are having this party who are expected to be present at the party give directions on how to get there.

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Hello Harman, I hope you and your family
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doing well. I am writing
this
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letter to you for attending a party next month at our lovely
home
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. As you know, I always wanted to go abroad for
my
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apply
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further
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education.
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, I applied for Canada study visa after completing my graduation. Yesterday, I received
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from my agent that my visa got approved.
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and
sharing
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share
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my happiness, I held a party at my
home
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to celebrate
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moment. I invited all our classmates to have fun together again,
my
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few relatives are
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coming
too
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to
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attend
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party. After completing our
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we all could not meet each other because of hectic schedules.
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, it is a good chance to meet and celebrate. I know you have shifted to
other
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another
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city for
doing
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a
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job
and
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after
that
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we bought a new
home
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. You don't know my
home
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location now. We have
new
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a new
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home
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just next to
post
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the post
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office of our village. You can call me once you are
there
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there,
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then
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I will pick you
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up from
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that location. Can't wait to see you all guys together again.
kind
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regards, Gurjeet

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task response
Task response: You answered all parts, but add a little more detail about the party time and place.
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Task response: Use a more natural friendly tone, for example 'I am happy to invite you' instead of 'I am writing this letter to you for attending'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order, but some sentences are too long. Use shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with simple words like 'so', 'because', 'also', and 'after that'.
task response
Task response: You clearly say why you are having the party.
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Task response: You say who will come to the party and give directions to your home.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph mostly has one main idea.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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