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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

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The pie chart illustrats compartion in energy capacity between 2015 and 2040. There are several types of energy, including fossil fuels, wind, solar and other renewables. Units were measured in gigawatts.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there is a significant upward trend in
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the use
 of renewable resources over the period in question.
On the other hand
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, the other categories witnessed a
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 in their use in 2040. The proportion of
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consumers of
 solar power would increase considerably, reaching 18% in 2040 compared to that in 2015 at 2%.
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, the production of wind energy is predicted to jump from 5% to 12% between 2015 and 2040.
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, those people predicted growth in the percentage of other renewables.
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, the percentage of dependence on fossil fuels would plummet from 64% to 44% during the same period.
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, there might
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 a slight reduction in the use of unclear power from 6% to 5%
at the end
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 of 2040.

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