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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealty if eaten too much

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The three pie charts compare the average proportions of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 contained in four typical meals consumed in the USA, namely
breakfast
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,
lunch
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,
dinner
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 and
snacks
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.
Overall
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,
dinner
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 contributes the highest percentages of
sodium
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 and saturated fat intake,
while
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snacks
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 are the largest source of added
sugar
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.
In contrast
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,
breakfast
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 consistently accounts for the smallest proportion of all three nutrients. Regarding
sodium
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 consumption,
dinner
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 makes up the largest share at 43%, followed by
lunch
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 at 29%.
Breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 each contribute only 14%, making them the least significant sources. A similar pattern can be observed for saturated fat.
Dinner
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 again records the highest figure, at 37%,
whereas
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lunch
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 accounts for 26%.
Snacks
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 contribute 21%,
while
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breakfast
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 contains the lowest percentage, at 16%. The distribution of added
sugar
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 is noticeably different.
Snacks
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 are by far the greatest contributor, representing 42% of total added
sugar
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 intake.
Dinner
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 ranks second at 23%,
while
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lunch
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 is responsible for 19%.
Breakfast
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 once again has the smallest proportion, accounting for just 16%. In conclusion,
dinner
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 is the primary source of
sodium
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 and saturated fat in the American diet,
whereas
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 added
sugar
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 is mainly consumed through
snacks
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.
Breakfast
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 remains the meal with the lowest contribution to all three nutrients.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, breakfast, lunch, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrient
  • percentage
  • prevalent
  • trend
  • comparison
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • implications
  • balanced (intake)
  • unhealthy
  • meal times
  • observations
  • habits
  • average
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • draw comparisons
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