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The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014 (in millions). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates the
amount
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 of
donations
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 provided to six types of charity by one company between 2012 and 2014.
Overall
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, social welfare
donations
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 reached
its
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their
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 highest point in the first
year
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, and dropped after one
year
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 and than climpped back to
it's
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their
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 peak point in the
last
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year
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.
However
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, arts and wildlife
were
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received
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 the lowest
amount
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 of
donations
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 throughout the years. Social welfare
donations
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 were at 23,000$ in 2012,
however
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 is experienced a decline to 17,000$ in 2013. In 2013 it reached
it's
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its
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 peak level at 26,000$.
On the other hand
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, education didn't record any major growth in
donations
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as
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to
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 social welfare. The total
amount
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 of
donations
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 for education in 2012 was
at 7,000$
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$7,000
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, and had a slight decrease in 2013 to 5,000$. In
2014
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2014,
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 education
donations
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 rose to 7,000$ just like how
i
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I
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 was in
thr
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the
 first
year
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.
Moreover
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,
environment
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environmental
donations
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was
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were
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 recorded at 7,000$ in 2012, in 2013 it experienced
and steadily
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a steady
 decrease to 5,000$ and rose back to 6,000$ in 2014.
Whereas
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,
health
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the
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 total
amount
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 of
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donations
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health donations
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 in 2012 was 6,000$ and rose to 7,000$ in 2013.
At
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In
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2014
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2014,
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it was
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apply
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it reached
it's
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its
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 highest level at 9,000$ of
donations
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. Wildlife and arts
donation
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donations
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 were the lowest
amount
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 of
donations
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gives
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given
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 among all 4
criteria's
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criteria
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. Wildlife reached its highest point in 2014
to 5,000$
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at $5,000
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and
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, and
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 arts reached 3,000$ in 2014.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, donations, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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