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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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The line graph illustrates the global
water
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consumption
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 of three different sectors—namely
agriculture
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, industry, and domestic—between 1900 and 2000. The table demonstrates the specific data of
Brazil
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 and
Democratic
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 Republic of Congo’s
water
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 use in 2000.
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,
although
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 the amount of
water
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 used all over the world showed an increasing trend,
agriculture
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 rose significantly,
while
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 domestic slightly. The
water
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 was higher than in Congo during 2000, owing to its larger population. In 1900, the amount of
water
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 used in
agriculture
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 was highest at 500 km3, industrial and domestic followed with much lower numbers at just over 50 km3. Over the next 5 decades,
agriculture
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 increased gradually at around 1000 km3
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however
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, the figure for
water
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 used in domestic and industrial remained stable. After 1950, agricultural
water
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 use continued its upward trend and rose rapidly, reaching its peak at 3000km3 in 2000. During the same period, the industry experienced a noticeable growth and widened the gap between the domestic ones after 1960, reaching nearly 1000 and 300km3 respectively. In the year 2000,
the
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Brazil
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’s
agriculture
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 and personal
water
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consumption
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 exceeded Cango. The figure for irrigated
water
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 in
Brazil
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 was 26500
km
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^2, which was quite larger than Cango with 100
km
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^2
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water
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of water
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consumption
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 in
agriculture
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. At the same time, the population in
Brazil
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 was more than in Cango too, which was 176 and 5.2 million
respectively
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, respectively
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, agriculture, brazil, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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