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The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014 (in millions). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates
donating funds
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donations
 by one
company
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 to six different types of charity between 2012 and 2014. The chart gives information in
dollars
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.
Overall
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, the charity donations increased over the given period. Funds that
given
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were given
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 to social welfare showed the highest figure all over the years,
whereas
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 other categories experienced declines. In 2012,
donating budget by
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the company's budget
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company
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 for only social welfare contained about 23 million
dollars
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, following the 2014 with approximately 24
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millions
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million
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.
However
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, in 2013 social
welfare's budget was lower than other
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welfare budget was lower than in previous
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 years wich was about 18
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millions
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million
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. Education and environment showed almost the same figures, with about 7 and 8
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millions
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million
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 respectively in 2012 and 2014, following
to
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apply
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these in
2013
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2013,
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 charity was given 6 and 5
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millions
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million
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 respectively.
Other categories
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The
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 trend
was
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in other categories was
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 noticeably low
in all over
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throughout
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 the given period. For
health
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health,
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 the
company
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 distributed about 7 and 8
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millions
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million
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dollars
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 respectively in 2012 and 2013,
while
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 the highest figure in
health
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the health
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 section
contains
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is
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 9
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millions
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million
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 in 2014. For wildlife and
arts
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arts,
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 divided donation by
company
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 was the lowest figures, with 3
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millions
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million
dollars
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on
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in
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 both
section
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sections
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 in 2012, approximately 4 and 5
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millions
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million dollars
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 respectively in other years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words company, dollars, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donation, charity, company, million, rise, fall, increase, decrease, highest, lowest, overall, compared with, while, from, to, over the period
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