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In order to overcome stress, some psychologists recommend doing nothing at all for a period of time during the day. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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 it is a commonly held belief that stress is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that if you faced any stress in your whole
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 that prevention is better than cure
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Answer the main question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this view all through the essay.
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Add one or two simple examples to support your ideas. This will make your answer stronger and easier to believe.
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Explain your ideas more. Some points are too short, so the reader cannot fully understand why you think this way.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer paragraph plan: intro, one body paragraph for first idea, one body paragraph for second idea, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple and correct way. Use words like first, also, for example, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easier to follow. Some sentences are very long and mixed, so the meaning is not clear.
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You gave a clear topic in the introduction: stress and how to deal with it.
coherence and cohesion
You included both an introduction and a conclusion.
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Your conclusion shows your final view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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